tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5253858089487405066.post3563267290930092808..comments2013-03-20T13:12:08.373-07:00Comments on Guy's Arts Journalism Blog: BeyonceAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16083236895564909119noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5253858089487405066.post-21054293082990162332013-02-06T04:58:56.110-08:002013-02-06T04:58:56.110-08:00Guy,
Your ending is much clearer now. I like how ...Guy,<br /><br />Your ending is much clearer now. I like how you relate her performance to the spectacle of the NFL game. I think it ties the piece together nicely.<br /><br />Yes, I still have your jenga.<br /><br />AlainaAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02796432779309014742noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5253858089487405066.post-18287377899041354612013-02-05T18:28:05.693-08:002013-02-05T18:28:05.693-08:00Alaina,
Thank you very much for your feedback. I&...Alaina,<br /><br />Thank you very much for your feedback. I'm definitely going to revise my last paragraph now because I was trying to describe her prowess as an entertainer/cultural icon. I should have thought more about the implications of my ending, and I'm glad you pointed it out.<br /><br />Guy<br /><br />P.S. Do you still have my jenga?Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16083236895564909119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5253858089487405066.post-66470953849801728802013-02-05T18:10:54.988-08:002013-02-05T18:10:54.988-08:00Guy,
Clever idea to review the Super Bowl halftim...Guy,<br /><br />Clever idea to review the Super Bowl halftime show. You support your piece with vivid examples and great imagery. It allowed me to relive the show in my head. <br /><br />It's also clear you did your research. You incorporated important and relevant information into your review which gave context to Beyoncé's performance and gave you credibility as a writer. Nicely done.<br /><br />I'm wary of your last sentence, however. Particularly the line, [Ms. Knowles] ... has set the 21st century standard for womanhood." <br /><br />My first question for you is, to whom did she set this standard? Did you mean to say she set it for herself? For you? For women across America? What new standard did she set exactly? One of "dominance?" One where "dominance" means women feel compelled to toss their tops into the audience? How is this a 21st century standard exactly?<br /><br />I'm left needing more context for your assertion. At this point, it's unclear what exactly these standards are and to whom they pertain.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02796432779309014742noreply@blogger.com